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Her eyes are droplets
that at will wax torrential
shredding scar tissue
revealing new flesh—
receding the Lake of Fire
where Archangel died
laying at the summit
of self-sacrificial vice.

Her hair is the daybreak:
cascading in waves
or ribbons of gold
irradiating potency
lighter than ash
that razes the sky,
and we hold our breath
for the cloudburst
Not used to writing free verse, but I enjoy playing with it. Hope it's decent.
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UntamedUnwanted Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This gorgeous work was featured here: untamedunwanted.deviantart.com…
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SammieOCeallaigh Aug 9, 2013  Student Writer
Thanks so much :D
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Tomoran Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Again...wow. Just gorgeous imagery and wonderful flow to the free verse. Awesome stuff.

Tom
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SammieOCeallaigh Aug 8, 2013  Student Writer
Much obliged for the compliment. Really appreciate the encouragement!
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Tomoran Aug 11, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're most welcome!

Tom
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BlacksmithofAngels Aug 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Love it
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MyLittleSquirrelGirl Aug 3, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Fantastic. 
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SammieOCeallaigh Aug 3, 2013  Student Writer
thanks :)
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MyLittleSquirrelGirl Aug 3, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Welcome.
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AyeAye12 Aug 3, 2013  Student Writer
Really like this. Got some good imagery here, like "ribbons of gold / irradiating potency / lighter than ash" and "Her eyes are droplets". 

Especially like the double use of "will" in the first stanza. Good stuff :3
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