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Her eyes are droplets
that at will wax torrential
shredding scar tissue
revealing new flesh—
receding the Lake of Fire
where Archangel died
laying at the summit
of self-sacrificial vice.

Her hair is the daybreak:
cascading in waves
or ribbons of gold
irradiating potency
lighter than ash
that razes the sky,
and we hold our breath
for the cloudburst
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She is the Rainby SammieOCeallaigh

Literature / Poetry / Romantic / General / Free Verse©2013-2015 SammieOCeallaigh
Not used to writing free verse, but I enjoy playing with it. Hope it's decent.
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This gorgeous work was featured here: untamedunwanted.deviantart.com…
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SammieOCeallaigh Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Student Writer
Thanks so much :D
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Tomoran Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Again...wow. Just gorgeous imagery and wonderful flow to the free verse. Awesome stuff.

Tom
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SammieOCeallaigh Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Student Writer
Much obliged for the compliment. Really appreciate the encouragement!
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Tomoran Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're most welcome!

Tom
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BlacksmithofAngels Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Love it
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MyLittleSquirrelGirl Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Fantastic. 
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SammieOCeallaigh Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2013  Student Writer
thanks :)
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MyLittleSquirrelGirl Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Welcome.
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AyeAye12 Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2013  Student Writer
Really like this. Got some good imagery here, like "ribbons of gold / irradiating potency / lighter than ash" and "Her eyes are droplets". 

Especially like the double use of "will" in the first stanza. Good stuff :3
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SammieOCeallaigh Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you very much. Glad you enjoyed it!
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Sherjaxon Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You are definitely not a cookie-cutter poet! So very well done!!
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SammieOCeallaigh Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013  Student Writer
Thanks so much! :D
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1CrazyVegetarian Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013
Wow, this is really, really fascinating.

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I'm really amazed that you're sort of new to free verse, because I feel like you've captured the spirit of it. I love writing free verse because it's, well...freeing! x'D You did a really nice job at capturing a moment and bringing together the big picture through little aspects.
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SammieOCeallaigh Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you so much for the comments! I grew up reading Shel Silverstein obsessively as a kid so when I found out I could try it too I was stuck in that rhyme and rhythm mind set. I just recently started trying to get my OCD out of it and go for free form; I'm very glad you think I pulled it off well.
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jojo22 Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Just beautiful :D
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SammieOCeallaigh Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013  Student Writer
Why thank you
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jojo22 Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome :D
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